Business and Administrative Communication 10th Edition by Kitty Locker,Donna Kienzler

تمرين 6

Dana Shomacher, an enthusiastic new hire of six months at Bear Foods, wants Stan Smith, regional head of HR at the grocery chain, to allow her to organize and publicize a food drive for Coastal Food Pantry. Revise, edit, and proof her e-mail.

After you have fixed Dana's e-mail, answer these questions in an e-mail to your instructor.
What revisions did you make Why
Many grocery stores already contribute to local food pantries. In addition to some staples, they provide items such as bakery goods that are past their sale date but still quite tasty, sacks for bagging groceries at the pantry, and even shopping carts to transport groceries to the cars of pantry clients. If Bear already contributes to Coastal, how should that fact change the content of Dana's e-mail
What edits did you make Why
What impression do you think this e-mail made on the head of human resources Explain. Do you think he granted Dana's request Why or why not
Submit both your version of Dana's e-mail and your analysis e-mail.