Lesikar's Business Communication: Connecting in a Digital World 13th Edition by Kathryn Rentz,Paula Lentz

Exercise 13

You work for an online mail-order company, Nonsensicals, that sells such novelty items as T-shirts with clever sayings, unique toys and games, and such household accessories as framed posters and retro table lamps. Most of the employees are young, somewhat quirky, and very Internet savvy. Now consider the following email sent to everyone from the company president:
Subject: No More Social Networking during Work Hours
It has become obvious to me that people are spending too much time doing social networking and not enough time actually working while on the job. From now on, you must do your networking (whether on MySpace, Facebook, LinkedIn, or any other such network) on breaks or during other personal time. Anyone found using these websites on company time will receive an official reprimand.
Considering the advice in this chapter, what would be the main ways to improve this negative announcement?