Lesikar's Business Communication: Connecting in a Digital World 13th Edition by Kathryn Rentz,Paula Lentz

Exercise 16

Criticize these sentences from cover messages:
Beginning Sentences
a. Please consider this my application for any position for which my training and experience qualify me.
b. Mr. Jerry Bono of your staff has told me about a vacancy in your loan department for which I would like to apply.
c. I am that accountant you described in your advertisement in today's Times-Record.
d. I want to work for you!
Sentences Presenting Selling Points
e. From 2009-2013 I attended Bradley University where I took courses leading to a BS degree with a major in finance.
f. I am highly skilled in trading corporate bonds as a result of three years spent in the New York office of Collins, Bragg, and Weaver.
g. For three years (2009-2012) I was in the loan department at Bank One.
h. My two strongest qualifications for this job are my personality and gift of conversation.
Sentences from Action Endings
i. I will call you on the 12th to arrange an interview.
j. If my qualifications meet your requirements, it would be greatly appreciated if you would schedule an interview for me.
k. Please call to set up an interview. Do it now-while it is on your mind.