Business and Administrative Communication 10th Edition by Kitty Locker,Donna Kienzler

Exercise 7

Revise each of these sentences to improve you-attitude and positive emphasis. You may need to add information.
1. I got laid off at Barlons three months ago when they down-sized.
2. Your company needs someone like me, who has the experience and knowledge to take your department to new heights.
3. I may not be the most qualified candidate you will see, but with your location and financial struggles, I am certainly the best you will get.
4. I understand that your company has had problems due to the mistranslation of documents during international ad campaigns.
5. Included in my résumé are the courses in Finance that earned me a fairly attractive grade average.
6. I am looking for a position that gives me a chance to advance quickly.
7. Although short on experience, I am long on effort and enthusiasm.
8. I have been with the company from its beginning to its present unfortunate state of bankruptcy.
9. I wish to apply for a job at Austin Electronics. I will graduate from Florida State in May. I offer you a degree in electrical engineering and part-time work at Best Buy.
10. I was so excited to see your opening. This job is perfect for me.
11. You will find me a dedicated worker, because I really need a job.