Deck 8: Editing: Unity and Emphasis

Question 1

Write a paragraph that includes all of the key points listed.
1. When the creation was complete, the ancestral beings told the Gagudju not to change anything, and to live in harmony with the land.
2. Visitors to the cave can see fine paintings of fish, spiny anteaters, goats, and pigs.
3. Until only twelve years ago, Aborigines called the Gagudju lived there.
4. A few elders possessed the ancient knowledge and history of their people.
5. Accredited visitors also visit the Gagudju who once lived at the site of the cavern.
6. Human beings have inhabited a small cavern in Australia's Kakadu National Park almost continuously for over 20, 000 years.
7. In remote parts of the world ancient cultures are being lost, while ethnographers race to save orally-transmitted history and culture.
8. Speaking softly, they tell about the time of creation, and 'The Dream Time," when ancestral beings created the land and gave birth to people.
9. The Gagudju possess a rich and ancient culture, but none of it is written down.
10. The Gagudju have now abandoned the cavern and live in another part of the park.

Answer 1

(7) In remote parts of the world ancient cultures are being lost, while ethnographers race to save orally-transmitted history and culture. (3, 6) Until only twelve years ago, Aborigines called the Gagudju lived in and near a small cavern in Australia's Kakadu National Park, a cavern almost continuously inhabited by human beings for over 20, 000 years. (2, 10) Preserved in the cave itself, which the Gagudju have now abandoned to live in another part of the park, are fine paintings of fish, spiny anteaters, goats, and pigs. (9, 4) Preserved in the memory of the few remaining elders, not written down, is the ancient knowledge and culture of their people. (5, 8) Speaking softly to accredited visitors, they tell about the time of creation, "The Dream Time," when ancestral beings created the land and gave birth to people. (1) When the creation was complete, the ancestral beings told the Gagudju not to change anything, and to live in harmony with the land.

Question 2

Write a paragraph that includes all of the key points listed.
1. In 1959 Waterloo received its official charter and independence.
2. The first became federated with the University of Waterloo in 1960, and the second became Waterloo Lutheran University, a separate institution now called Wilfrid Laurier University.
3. The relationship, in many ways, reflects that of established successful parents and their newly-adult, independent, equally-successful, and somewhat rebellious offspring.
4. Western became non-denominational in 1908 and added many other faculties.
5. UWO is the parent, having been established first.
6. The University of Western Ontario, in London, Ontario, and the Universities of Waterloo and Wilfrid Laurier, in Waterloo, Ontario, while seeming rivals, actually have very strong ties to one another.
7. In fact, UWO began in 1863 with Huron College, an Anglican theological school; arts courses came next, and then, in 1882, its world-renowned Medical school affiliated itself with the University.
8. Western's world-famous Medical school is now rivaled by its offspring, the University of Waterloo's Engineering and Computer Science programs.
9. Waterloo's associated colleges included the University of St. Jerome's College, and Waterloo College.
10. The University of Waterloo began in 1957 as an affiliated Engineering faculty of the University of Western Ontario, and offered the first co-operative education program in Canada.

Answer 2

(5) Independent universities in Canada often have the most interesting beginnings, of which their students are sometimes unaware. (9) Those beginnings have occasionally united widely-separated parts of Canada. (10) The University of Victoria, while on the far west coast of Canada, was initially affiliated with McGill University in Montreal. (4) It offered first-and second-year arts and sciences courses, which counted towards a McGill degree. (6) However, when the University of British Columbia opened, Victoria College suspended its program. (1) When this program was re-instated after five years, it kept the same mandate, but the new affiliation was with UBC. (8) Although it awarded its first degree fully completed in Victoria in 1961, it was not fully independent of UBC until 1963. (2) Today, the University of Victoria offers many specialized programs that attract students from all over Canada. (7) Some McGill students even end up in various graduate programs at the University of Victoria. (3) In their choice of post-graduate study, these students are in some way returning to the University of Victoria's initial affiliation with McGill.

Question 3

Write a paragraph that includes all of the key points listed.
1. Sloping down from the mountains are plateaus and lowlands, a great plain area, grassy marshlands, and beaches.
2. The island, 1, 500 km long and 20-700 km wide, located in the Arctic Archipelago is the largest in Canada, and the fifth-largest in the world.
3. Baffin Island's spectacular and complex geography, fascinating history, rich natural resources, and abundant wildlife, make it a wonder of Canada's North.
4. The Dorset were likely the first inhabitants, settling around 1, 500 years ago.
5. Although Frobisher thought he had found large gold deposits, his ore was useless; the island is, however, rich in lead, zinc, and silver deposits.
6. Geologically, a continuation of the Canadian Shield, the island has a kind of mountainous 'spine'.
7. Baffin Bay, between the island and Greenland, is the wintering ground for narwhal, walrus, baluga, bowhead whales, and bearded harp seals.
8. Explorers included Martin Frobisher, John Davis, William Baffin, Luke Fox, and W. E. Parry, but the island resisted accurate mapping until the late nineteenth century.
9. Canada's first National Park north of the Arctic Circle, Auyuittuq, boasts glaciers, lakes, waterfalls, and Mt. Odin, at 2, 200 metres high.
10. The island is also rich in wildlife; it is the nesting place for millions of birds, some protected in a sanctuary at Cape Dorset.

Answer 3

(3) Baffin Island's spectacular and complex geography, fascinating history, rich natural resources, and abundant wildlife, make it a wonder of Canada's North. (2) The island, 1, 500 km long and 20-700 km wide, located in the Arctic Archipelago is the largest in Canada, and the fifth-largest in the world. (6) Geologically, a continuation of the Canadian Shield, the island has a kind of mountainous 'spine'. (1) Sloping down from the mountains are plateaus and lowlands, a great plain area, grassy marshlands, and beaches. (9) Canada's first National Park north of the Arctic Circle, Auyuittuq, boasts glaciers, lakes, waterfalls, and Mt. Odin, at 2, 200 metres high. (4) The Dorset were likely the first inhabitants, settling around 1, 500 years ago. (8) Explorers included Martin Frobisher, John Davis, William Baffin, Luke Fox, and W. E. Parry, but the island resisted accurate mapping until the late nineteenth century. (5) Although Frobisher thought he had found large gold deposits, his ore was useless; the island is, however, rich in lead, zinc, and silver deposits. (10) The island is also rich in wildlife; it is the nesting place for millions of birds, some protected in a sanctuary at Cape Dorset. (7) Baffin Bay, between the island and Greenland, is the wintering ground for narwhal, walrus, baluga, bowhead whales, and bearded harp seals.

Question 4

Write a paragraph that includes all of the key points listed.
1. Some of the writers of "mysteries" or "cosies", as they are sometimes called, are Agatha Christie, Dorothy Sayers, and Margery Allingham.
2. "Cosies" can be quite formulaic and therefore barely "realistic".
3. In the "cosy", the puzzle is paramount and the means of death for the poor victim is sometimes quite elaborate and peculiar.
4. The "psychological" detective novel is much less formulaic than the "cosy", and perhaps more 'modern', but the portrait of the criminal can be as elaborate and peculiar as the means of death in the "cosy".
5. At the other end of the spectrum is the psychological" detective novel, which focuses not so much on "whodunit" as it does on "whydunnit".
6. The reader knows the perpetrator of the crime from the beginning.
7. Rarely can writers in this genre write both of these kinds of detective fiction successfully.
8. The reader does not know, and the novel is usually an unfolding of, the 'why', or workings of the perpetrator's mind that have driven him or her to commit the crime, which is usually at the beginning of the novel.
9. The solving of the crime, then, is secondary to the understanding of a criminal mind.
10. Within the genre of detective fiction are different kinds of books; two of these kinds are the classic "mystery" from the "Golden Age" of detective fiction and the "psychological" detective novel.

Question 5

Write a paragraph that includes all of the key points listed.
1. The chimp then appears to recognize the connection between its behaviour and that of the stranger in the mirror.
2. The chimp examines itself in the mirror, looking at parts it can't normally see, such as lips and gums.
3. According to recent research, chimpanzees, among the higher primates, have one of the highest levels of self-awareness.
4. In the next stage, the chimp turns its attention to itself.
5. When a chimpanzee first sees its reflection in the mirror, it will behave as if it were encountering another chimp.
6. However, when mirrors are placed in a cage of macaques, each monkey will continue to act as if it were confronting another macaque.
7. Self-awareness and other observed behaviours put chimps closer to human beings than most of the primate family.
8. Researchers conclude from this difference that chimps, therefore, have a higher level of self-awareness than macaques.
9. Other observations of primate behaviour don't offer as clear-cut a demonstration of chimp self-awareness.
10. Observing the reactions and behaviours of different members of the monkey family to mirror images of themselves has lead the researchers to this conclusion.

Question 6

Write a paragraph that includes all of the key points listed.
1. We three did not always agree about the values the Dead stood for, but we sure loved the band's music.
2. We also loved the atmosphere surrounding the Dead's concerts, as much as the concerts themselves.
3. No one enjoyed the Volkswagen buses plastered with peace and flower-power decals, the people selling Dead paraphernalia, the sharing of food and resources, more.
4. To John and Cathy, the Grateful Dead embodied all the vices and virtues of the sixties.
5. One group that never seemed passé, although their music never changed from the sixties, was the Grateful Dead.
6. John, Cathy and I like to go to rock concerts.
7. John prefers the "classic" groups like the Eagles and the Who, both of whom have had reunion tours.
8. I prefer somewhat more contemporary groups such as the Cranberries and Hootie and the Blowfish, but I have to admit, their sounds are similar to some old groups that John and Cathy like.
9. For a long time, John and Cathy were Deadheads, people who travel from city to city following the Grateful Dead on tour.
10. Free love, communal living, pacifism, mind-expansion through drugs, these are the values the Dead professed.

Question 7

Write a paragraph that includes all of the key points listed.
1. However, linguists point to the worldwide use of English as unique in the history of languages.
2. About one-fifth of the world's population now speaks English well enough to communicate.
3. They argue that fears of a decline in the use of English should not be taken too seriously.
4. Some North Americans worry that the English language is losing ground.
5. The number of people who speak English as a second language is growing quickly.
6. In a number of countries where numerous languages and dialects are spoken, English has some practical advantages for language factions trying to communicate among themselves.
7. Because the Internet's linguistic patterns and best software are in English, it is impossible to carry on an electronic relationship without knowledge of English.
8. The Internet provides educational opportunities that could not be imagined a few years ago.
9. Technology has also had a dramatic impact on the spread of English throughout the world.
10. Because English has become the international language of commerce, communication, and scientific discourse, people who are concerned about its status have nothing to worry about.