The following sentences form an essay. Proofread them for consistency, parallelism, and concise language. Select the letter of the error in each sentence. Decades ago, researchers realized that high blood pressure is a cardiovascular danger signal and that it is a risk to the health of one's heart.
A) consistency
B) parallelism
C) concise language

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The sentence can be made more concise by eliminating redundancy. "Cardiovascular danger signal" can be replaced with "risk factor for cardiovascular disease" and "risk to the health of one's heart" can be shortened to "cardiac risk." The revised sentence would read: "Decades ago, researchers realized that high blood pressure is a risk factor for cardiovascular disease and cardiac risk."

The Following Sentences Form an Essay