The following sentences form an essay. Proofread them for consistency, parallelism, and concise language. Select the letter of the error in each sentence. High blood pressure can also force small blood vessels to burst like an overstressed garden hose. If that happens in the brain, that malfunction is called a stroke ⎯ the other major cardiovascular killer besides heart attacks, which many people die from as well.
A) consistency
B) parallelism
C) concise language

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The sentence could be made more concise by eliminating unnecessary words or phrases, such as "as well" at the end, which is redundant given the context.

The Following Sentences Form an Essay