Read the following draft paragraph, and then select the letter of the sentence in each set below that is the best revision.
My niece is a ballet dancer. She has been accepted to the Dance Theater of Harlem. She will probably be a member of a professional dance company sometime in the future. She loves to dance. She has been dancing since she was five years old. She dances solo and also as a member of the ballet corps. I always enjoy attending her performances.
Which sentence is the best revision?
A) I always enjoy attending her performances.
B) I always enjoy attending the performances of my niece the ballet dancer.
C) I enjoy attending her performances, not only to see my niece dance, but to see the beautiful costumes and hear the wonderful music.

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Option C improves the original paragraph by adding specific details about why the speaker enjoys attending their niece's performances. It emphasizes the love for not only seeing their niece dance but also admiring the beautiful costumes and music. Option A simply restates the last sentence of the original paragraph without any additional information, and option B adds unnecessary repetitive details about the niece's profession and relationship to the speaker.

Read the Following Draft Paragraph, and Then Select the Letter