TD Bank Financial Group

TD Bank Financial Group
Thom Hollis works as a financial advisor for TD Bank Financial Group. His job involves providing investment advice to many clients, in person or on the phone, and writing many letters and e-mails. He has an appointment tomorrow with Ji-Wan, a client, to review her personal investment portfolio. Before she comes in, Thom has to review her profile, decide what changes to suggest, and put together a proposed portfolio. He has a recent finance diploma, but because he is still relatively new to his job, he wants to collect as much information as he can on appropriate investments for her, so he decides to send an e-mail to Alyson, his manager, to see if she has any suggestions or advice. Besides preparing for his meeting with Ji-Wan, Thom has several other tasks he must work on.
-Thom writes the following sentence in the first draft of a letter to a client: My name is Thom Hollis and I am writing to you to ask you to consider meeting with me to review your investment portfolio. He decides to revise the sentence because it is an example of wordy writing. Which of the following does the text indicate is the problem?

A) long lead-in
B) wordy expression
C) needless adverb
D) outdated expression