TD Bank Financial Group
Thom Hollis works as a financial advisor for TD Bank Financial Group. His job involves providing investment advice to many clients, in person or on the phone, and writing many letters and e-mails. He has an appointment tomorrow with Ji-Wan, a client, to review her personal investment portfolio. Before she comes in, Thom has to review her profile, decide what changes to suggest, and put together a proposed portfolio. He has a recent finance diploma, but because he is still relatively new to his job, he wants to collect as much information as he can on appropriate investments for her, so he decides to send an e-mail to Alyson, his manager, to see if she has any suggestions or advice. Besides preparing for his meeting with Ji-Wan, Thom has several other tasks he must work on.
-Thom takes care to revise and proofread all of the messages he sends. He decides to rewrite the following sentence because it illustrates a writing error discussed in the text. What is the error? At this point in time, your account will be credited $6.00 in view of the fact that your monthly service charge appeared twice in the month of June.

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The phrase "at this point in time" is wordy and unnecessary. The sentence could be simplified to "Your account will be credited $6.00 because your monthly service charge appeared twice in June."