Read the following paragraph. For each set of sentences below the paragraph, select the letter of the sentence that provides the best revision for consistency; parallel structure; sentence variety; and fresh, concise language.
In 1929, toy dealer Edwin S. Lowe came across people having more fun than a barrel of monkeys while playing a game at a carnival in rural Georgia. A leader calls out each and every number, and the players use beans to cover the matching numbers on their cards. The winners yelled "Beano!" at the top of their lungs when they had filled in a row of numbers. Quick as a wink, Lowe saw the game was a winner. Sharp as a tack, he returned home and began testing the game on friends. Lowe markets the game as "Bingo!" and it sells like crazy.
Which sentence provides the best revision for consistency; parallel structure; sentence variety; and fresh, concise language?
A) The winners yelled "Beano!" when they had filled in a row of numbers.
B) The winners yell "Beano!" at the top of their lungs when they had filled in a row of numbers.
C) The winners yelled "Beano!" at the top of their lungs when they had filled in a row of numbers.

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Sentence A provides the best revision because it maintains consistency in verb tense and offers a more concise and clear expression compared to the other options.

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