Read the following paragraph. For each set of sentences below the paragraph, select the letter of the sentence that provides the best revision for consistency; parallel structure; sentence variety; and fresh, concise language.
In 1929, toy dealer Edwin S. Lowe came across people having more fun than a barrel of monkeys while playing a game at a carnival in rural Georgia. A leader calls out each and every number, and the players use beans to cover the matching numbers on their cards. The winners yelled "Beano!" at the top of their lungs when they had filled in a row of numbers. Quick as a wink, Lowe saw the game was a winner. Sharp as a tack, he returned home and began testing the game on friends. Lowe markets the game as "Bingo!" and it sells like crazy.
Which sentence provides the best revision for consistency; parallel structure; sentence variety; and fresh, concise language?
A) Quick as a wink, Lowe saw the game was a winner.
B) Quick as a wink, Lowe sees the game is a winner.
C) Lowe immediately saw the potential of the game.

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Quizplus · Accepted Answer

Option C provides a more concise and clear sentence structure that is consistent with the tone of the paragraph. It also eliminates the need for an idiom like "quick as a wink" which can be considered cliché. Additionally, the use of "immediately" adds a sense of urgency and excitement to the discovery of the game, which fits with the overall tone of the paragraph.

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